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POETRY [Nov. 21st, 2005|01:23 pm]
It Is Black and White

it is black
it is white

it is dark
it is light

it is blood
it is dust

it is shivering steel
it is rust

it is life
it is death

it is nothing
it is all we have left.

In a Running Car, Darkly Within

Now I am to marry
for a gentle reason

Season after season
I hope to regain those very few years
like a scar
spanning some hidden surface of skin.
In a running car, darkly within,
Now I am more careful with the pen.
I fear the words I form
out of shadow and subtle light.

Night growing out of night-
Very soon children
will ask about the vast
and empty colors of the past,
but better they never cast
joyless questions
to the empty, echoing earth.

-November 18

You Are a Well

Deep and endless well,
Never do I wish to reach
the bottom, the end.

Sound Does Not Travel in a Vacuum

Dead night's cold vacuum
Darkened yard or silent room-
sleep is a still tomb.

From: dclove808
2005-11-21 10:19 pm (UTC)
Love them all, especially the haikus!
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[User Picture]From: nuages
2005-11-21 10:32 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much. I have been rather self-conscious about my writing lately due to lack of chaotic, extreme emotions to set a flame under my writing, so to speak. I can take all the reassurance I can get.
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From: dclove808
2005-11-22 01:06 am (UTC)
Sometimes I have more to write when there is less going on, maybe due to the amount of time I have to observe my surroundings? Either way, I understand where you are coming from. I am in desperate need of feedback at certain times and those are usually the times when I don't receive any. (Like, for instance, now.) Haha.
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[User Picture]From: nuages
2005-11-22 01:53 am (UTC)
I would love to form a cooperative critique group of two with you. Haha. This means two people who value each other's opinions on writing trading suggestions/compliments/comments from one another. What do you say?
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From: dclove808
2005-11-22 02:19 am (UTC)
Exactly what I've been looking for since I started being serious about writing.
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